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Post by Sunshine on Oct 6, 2011 14:54:34 GMT
My roof blew off today
Now I can see the sun shine
And it can see me
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Post by Daphne on Oct 6, 2011 17:56:02 GMT
A haiku with a bit of humour. And one syllable too many. A haiku traditionally has 17 (5-7-5) but yours has 18 (6-7-5) but what's a spare syllable between us?
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Post by alex on Oct 6, 2011 19:41:29 GMT
what the heck - rules are made to be broken.
how about...
My roof just blew off
Now I can see the sun shine
And it can see me
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Post by annettecurtain on Oct 7, 2011 8:46:15 GMT
Last time I blew off
I tried to write a haiku
But it really stank
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Post by justfred on Oct 9, 2011 17:44:01 GMT
If you lived where I live you wouldnt worry about bloody poetic forms.
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Post by Jay on Oct 9, 2011 23:29:12 GMT
Last time I blew off I tried to write a haiku But it really stank lmao at this. Mine stink really bad as well. I think it's all the pork pies I eat. I've cut down a lot though, I only eat 10 a day now, but 15 on sundays.  |
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Post by Daphne on Oct 9, 2011 23:46:26 GMT
10 is quite a lot.
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Post by Jay on Oct 9, 2011 23:55:07 GMT
a lot less than I used to eat though ! |
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Post by Daphne on Oct 9, 2011 23:59:23 GMT
It shows.
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Post by Jay on Oct 10, 2011 0:01:10 GMT
Thank you. I have lost 52.5 stone in total. I have now reached my target weight. :-)
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Post by Daphne on Oct 10, 2011 10:47:30 GMT
That will be a relief to the providers of lists and escalators in South London.
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Post by weewatto on Oct 13, 2011 14:26:04 GMT
but what's a spare syllable between us?  ?? WRONG, that's what. Don't encourage lacksadaisicality and a blatant disregard for the rules dear. That's what got you in hot water last time. Hello by the way. Oh, and I like the haiku Sunshine. Apart from the wrongness. |
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Post by Daphne on Oct 13, 2011 17:10:17 GMT
We in hot water? Moi? Pillox.
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